January 24th

Bright carpet of trees
softly embroidered with vivid
swaying light citron leaves

Claudia Messelodi 

To read more of Claudia’s work please visit Stream of Stones
What I like about this haiku is the unusual analogy. I normally think of a carpet as being at ground level eg a carpet of bluebells. Turning the canopy of trees into a carpet is different and gives the reader a sense of height as she looks down at the citron leaves. I liked the delicate nature of this carpet that the writer conveys by describing it as “softly embroidered”. Freya
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One Response to January 24th

  1. thanks so much for posting my haiku!

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